Our whole school went to swimming sports at the Ngaruawahia pools yesterday.Mr.K called the eight year old girls to the small pool to start our race. I stood behind the small brick wall along the line of my contestants. I stared at the water and it stared back at me, beckoning me into its trap. I suddenly heard Mr. Emms say, “Hop into the pool!!!!”
I dived into the pool and shivered like nothing else because the pool was ice cold, so I held onto the edge of the pool and waited for the whistle to blow. Suddenly I heard the whistle blow so loud that I couldn't miss the sound and I started swimming as fast as I could. I tried my best to catch up to them but they were too fast for me so I ended up coming last.
At the end of the day, we had our free swim. When I heard that we were having a free swim, I quickly got into my togs, and hopped into the pool.
When I was in the pool, I swam as gracefully as a mermaid to the other end of the pool. When I got there, I swam around in circles, then I swam as fast as a cheetah to the other side of the pool. I spotted my friends in the deep pool so I hopped into the pool and met up with Alex.
Well done, Lara.You have given the readers very good pictures in their minds when you wrote, as gracefully as a mermaid, and, as fast as a cheetah.
ReplyDeleteI love the way you used personification - the water beckoned me into its trap.